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Betty Tuesdays

The Intruder

The house was dark. The scenes from the TV casting a myriad of moving colours on the watcher and her surroundings. She had fallen asleep though. Her neck was bent at an awkward angle, her fingers lax around the remote.

She was middle-aged. Most estimated her age at late 30s. She was 44. She’d been married three times. She was certain her present business tycoon was The One. She did love him. And she’d been with him for 6years. A record.

The very business tycoon entered the room. Shaking his full head of grey at the scene, he turned off the TV and tapped her.

“Victoria?”

She jumped. Startled. Her usual reaction to being wakened. She looked about frantically. He tapped her again. She settled.

“Oh. I slept off.” She smiled at herself for stating the obvious.

There was a knock at the door. They looked at each other, both frowning. A visitor at such a late hour? She frowned; he squared his jaw and shoulders and approached the massive bullet-proof door.

“Who is it?”

“Na me, Oga. Musa.”

They both relaxed. He turned the lock and was startled when Musa was pushed in by a mask-wearing taller man.

“Jesus!” Victoria screamed and rolled to the carpeted floor.

The intuder paused. Raising his right arm, he showed off his gun.

“Everybody, down.” He didn’t shout. He had such a commanding aura; even the house-owner didn’t hesitate much before kneeling.

He pushed the tied-up Musa to the side of the door and pointing at the tycoon, he gestured to the expensive couch behind which Victoria was cowering.

“Sit.”

Trying hard to keep a calm exterior, the tycoon did as was asked.

“Victoria. Sit too.” The inturder said making the tycoon flinch at the familiar use of her name.

Shaking and confused, Victoria joined her husband. She reached out to clutch his hand, pulling it to her lap. She huddled closer.

The tycoon thought it was time to take control. “Young man, how much do you..”

“Shut up!” The word resounded in the large room and the tycoon’s eyes widened at the authority it carried. This was no tout. He shut up.

“I just want to talk.” The intruder said, then paused. He lowered the gun to his side. “Do you have kids?”

They were both silent.

“Answer me!”

“Yes.” “No.” They said together.

His hand clenched around the gun.

“What.. what we mean is I have a daughter but Victoria has n..no children..”

The intruder sat heavily on the marble center table.

He was silent. Then:

“Why shouldn’t I kill you?”

Victoria started sobbing loudly. The tycoon nudged her to shut up. She buried her head in her hands and continued to sob, but quietly; already envisioning the end of her life.

“You have no reason to live? Funny. Let me tell you a story…”

The tycoon looked wildly about. He was one of the crazies, what did the TV shows say again? Just let them talk. His eyes flitted about, looking for a way out. Let him talk.

“My mother hated me. She was raped as a teenager by a robber, a killer. I was the product. Her parents won’t let her kill me… She always reminded me I was the spawn of the robber, a killer, the devil..”

Victoria had stiffened beside her husband. The tycoon was barely listening.

“She left me in church one day when I was seven. I never saw her again..”

Victoria had stopped sobbing. She still didn’t look up but her breaths were coming out in sharp gasps.

“Until today..”

The tycoon finally listened. “What?!” He looked confused.

“Victoria. My mother? Weren’t you listening?” The arm with the gun came up again. A silent but heavy threat.

He pulled off the mask swiftly with his left hand. “Mother, look at me.”

The tycoon’s eyes widened. “Victoooriaaa…” He whispered softly. She didn’t answer. “Victoooriaaa! Is any of this true? You.. you said you couldn’t have children.. Victoria. Victoooriaaaa?!”

“Yes?!” She fell to the ground. Her face contorted with tears. She still refused to look up. “What can I say? What could I do? I was raped! Raped!”

“I. Said. Look. At. Me!”

The intruder stood up again. He had gained command of himself again.

Taking a long deep breath, he pointed the gun at her.

“Mother.”

She raised her head, still sobbing; but only to the level of his wide chest rising and falling steadily.

“Mother..  I’m exactly what you said I was. Now tell me again, why shouldn’t I kill you?”

END.

A not-so-simple question is what I’ve put before you today. I’d like to read your answers, opinions and comments. Thanks for stopping by. Ciao.

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74 thoughts on “The Intruder

  1. 🙂 BRB

    Posted by pebbles | June 21, 2011, 9:02 am
  2. dammit 😦

    Posted by ShoWade | June 21, 2011, 9:03 am
  3. Wow…ummm cos she is a woman in pain that was running from her past.

    They both need Jesus…lol

    Posted by S.Charles | June 21, 2011, 9:04 am
  4. Too many reasons not to…..but I think of any 😦

    Posted by Kolawole Bastien Shawana | June 21, 2011, 9:05 am
  5. Sigh*

    Posted by kechilauren | June 21, 2011, 9:05 am
  6. They all deserve a second chance.

    That could be a reason

    Posted by S.Charles | June 21, 2011, 9:07 am
  7. OMG! Karma! Difficult choice there, especially if u ve gone thru a whole lot wen ur mother cud av helped out. Anyways, still i choose ‘walk away’. Let her past hunt her.

    Posted by Bubble G. | June 21, 2011, 9:09 am
  8. Just as I was bout to grab some popcorn.m

    Posted by beeyuteeful | June 21, 2011, 9:11 am
  9. He shouldn’t kill her. She did was she thought was best for her at that time. At least, she dropped him off at a church. She didn’t abort him or leave him to die in the trash or on the street. He doesn’t have to love her, but she doesn’t deserve to die. I know it’s difficult, but he should forgive her and move on with his life. Plus, the fact that his father was a robber doesn’t mean that he should also be a robber. He needs to rise above whatever his parents did to him. I know our parents shape our lives, but sooner or later, we have to take our lives into our own hands and choose our destiny.

    Posted by All Heart | June 21, 2011, 9:14 am
  10. Lovely story, as usual. Very sexy. LOL. I feel the guy’s pain sha. Abandoned *smh*. But chill. Lemme be sure. Is the question we’re supposed to answer “why shouldn’t I kill you?”

    Posted by cecenostockings | June 21, 2011, 9:16 am
  11. Geez! 4 a second i tot it was an obsessed ex-lover nd he was gonna do her right in front of her hubby…lol!

    Posted by dee2qte | June 21, 2011, 9:16 am
  12. Obiously the most christian comment would be that he shouldn’t kill her forgive and forget,kiss and makeup.
    But being realistic, with someonee harbouring that much hate since he was 7years..he has to act it out somehow.I think showing up at her houuse is enough torture already, who wud hav thought that a small mistaake of 7years could almost cost her,her life:(
    Killing her wud be extreme.Confronting her is enough IMO
    On a lighter note, I think I know the intruder behind the mask in the picture.okbye:)

    Posted by kechilauren | June 21, 2011, 9:16 am
  13. Nice 1…I swear I thot he was going to rape her..he should give a chance, so he can experience
    the love he never had..

    Posted by @musamaestro | June 21, 2011, 9:17 am
  14. He was dumped in a church but he still turned out like that, suffer no fools, LET HER DIE. She has suffered no doubt, and her jumping from marriage to marriage shows she is still haunted. One of the has to be purged and the boy has a better chance, just maybe he shouldn’t be the one to kill her.

    Posted by loba | June 21, 2011, 9:24 am
  15. It’s difficult 4 him to forgive Victoria, but she should be given another chance. She’s been married 3 times without a child, so maybe she’s getting what she deserves after all. Good read btw.

    Posted by ifyyy | June 21, 2011, 9:25 am
  16. I was just about to adjust my crotch and settle in to read it when it just abruptly ended 😦

    Posted by Ekwe | June 21, 2011, 9:26 am
  17. Oh my! The toolsman blog! Always a delight!! Oh and I wonder what the son was waiting for..SHOOT HER ALREADY!! Bastardish whore of a woman!!..okay fine! That was too harsh..but she shld have been mature enough at age 44 to know she had to look for her son…

    Posted by jadesola | June 21, 2011, 9:26 am
  18. (-__-)

    Posted by thetoolsman | June 21, 2011, 9:27 am
  19. First of all, the son loves the mother too much. Killing her would hardly be an option. In the end, he is more likely to turn the gun on himself.

    Secondly, if he did want to kill her, he woulda done it already.

    And lastly, I don’t think he should kill her. She is rich mehn, move in and play the role of a rich man’s son. Everyone is happier for it. 😀

    Posted by DOMINATRIX | June 21, 2011, 9:32 am
  20. 1. Bcos I didn’t kill u. D only option u have, my son, is to take me BACK to that church where I left u. We can work things out from there.
    2. I made a terrible mistake for I was young, naive & greatly tormented…but I neva stopped thinking about u.
    3. Hellooo…I am still ur mother!! Ah!
    If d boy does not pull the trigger after any of these utterances, my mission here is done & I can now wear my ‘The Negotiator’ cap!!

    Posted by chukyjunior | June 21, 2011, 9:32 am
  21. I’d like to ask same questions 1 day…….but in a more relaxed atmosphere…throw some asun,nkwobi and things in d picture

    Posted by NeglectedSon | June 21, 2011, 9:34 am
  22. *them

    Posted by loba | June 21, 2011, 9:35 am
  23. you do? I’ve always wondered about you…

    Posted by thetoolsman | June 21, 2011, 9:38 am
  24. I swear down..exact same thought…*now upset and leaving the building* hisss!!!!… Lol

    Posted by mr I'm out of this world | June 21, 2011, 9:41 am
  25. I don’t think he should kill her, just because it’s not worth it. If he kills her, he’s going to carry that guilt for the rest of his life. It won’t change anything, and it won’t make him feel better. The best thing would be to just walk out of the house. He doesn’t have to kill her, the guilt will.
    Good story, Pemi. I like.

    Posted by TecknicoleurGrl | June 21, 2011, 9:41 am
  26. um…Cece…sexy…ok o…

    Posted by musingsofagidimallam | June 21, 2011, 9:44 am
  27. As usual Betty’s at the top of her game.
    On to d matter at hand, the guy won’t gain a damn thing if he kills her…nothing. Rather if he does it’ll haunt him for the rest of his life. Nobody’s saying they’ll become a wonderful family again, but if he doesn’t deal with his suppressed anger issues, they’ll eat him from the inside out.
    @Kechilauren the “Christian” option is the best in this case, cos that’s the only way they all win.

    Posted by musingsofagidimallam | June 21, 2011, 9:50 am
  28. Abegi! He shud blow off her kneecaps! Lol! Buh seriously, I cny imagine d amount of hatred dat dude had grown 2av over d years. D only way out of dis wud be for him to kill her and himself! My opinion tho! 😀

    Posted by sassyBigma | June 21, 2011, 9:50 am
  29. Killing her would satisfy his thirst but only in the moment. He’ll feel even more empty if he goes thru with it…
    The fear he instills will do a better job..
    Nice piece betty.

    Posted by sirkellz | June 21, 2011, 9:58 am
  30. I also thought the intruder was an old lover who was going to Rape her while the tycoon watched.
    To the question,why shouldn’t he kill Victoria? Because despite all she did to him,she’s his mother and he still loves her. I believe its Love(not hate) that made him hunt for his real mother and its the need to be re-assured of her love despite everything that led to the confrontation.
    If he really wanted to kill her he would just do it without asking and probably kill himself too!
    Victoria has been married thrice with no issue,that’s her punishment.
    Abeg, make dem hug and kiss!

    Posted by mabijo | June 21, 2011, 10:00 am
  31. Why!? You’ve gotta be kiddin! Buhahahaha… That’s rhetorical ryt!? Pfft!joker! Finally I think the fellow was quite balls-less *pardon me* if he really wanted to, he wudda walked right in, told victoria who he was and why he was there, shot her straight in the heart (without askin her permission or opinion *rme), walked out and gone to have a stiff drink at home and wait for his killer (karma). …A son, who hasn’t seen his mother in aaaages. The mother who he very well knows made the decisions she did out of desperation. She was raped! RAPED goddamit! And as a teenager. U can’t blame her much for abandoning him. She left him in a CHURCH! She thought it through. She was a good person. And her folks wanted her to kill him but she didn’t… The fool shouldn’t kill her because she didn’t kill him first!!! Which btw would have been a more easily justifiable situation.

    Posted by *insertPseudonym* | June 21, 2011, 10:01 am
  32. Who says they will all win? Not necessarily because the pain will always be there reminding them everyday. We as humans can’t forget anything. Someone has to go.

    Posted by loba | June 21, 2011, 10:02 am
  33. And I Love betty’s writting style..:*

    My mums name is also Victoria..err.pemi.u arre judgedb

    Posted by kechilauren | June 21, 2011, 10:03 am
  34. I’m not saying I’d do the same but can you blame the woman for wanting to be rid of any reminders of a black time in her life? Granted you really shouldn’t brand a child for his father’s stupidity but she has feelings too no?…..as for the ‘to kill or not to kill question’ hmmmm if I were in his shoes killing would be too easy,..maybe some psychological damage and perhaps later I’d learn to forgive….perhaps

    Posted by jAyajade | June 21, 2011, 10:04 am
  35. All of them should just sit down with a 1 Litre bottle of zobo and talk things out.

    Posted by cecenostockings | June 21, 2011, 10:15 am
  36. Keshi lauren welldorne for sporteen out d orvious! Deh lord sehs we shld forgif n forget. Abeg @thetoolsman betty and slimsiren? Similarities? Yeah… Me too

    Posted by @hueyblack | June 21, 2011, 10:17 am
  37. Yay Betty!Great storytelling. Some AfMag sturves. 😛

    Posted by ie | June 21, 2011, 10:23 am
  38. Hooooooooold up! The fuck is all this talk of her deserving it or karma or her guilt n shit!???? SHE WAS RAPEDDDDD!!!! AS A FUCKING TEENAGER! AND HER PARENTS WANTED HER TO KILL HIM! #pause! Talkin bout answering questions… If mother were to ask a question, she would probbly say: “If it were you… What would you do”!!!?? #chewOnThat! For a tad more.

    Posted by *insertPseudonym* | June 21, 2011, 10:23 am
  39. He could’ve have been a better person made the most of his life prove her wrong and drove into the building with a Bentley, let her see she was wrong for thinking he would have been like the father he never knew! Victoria was wrong but from the lessons we learn from life we know better than taking revenge in such a cold manner I am not in his shoes I don’t know what he had to face. I’d encourage him to shoot her if that would change anything that has already happened to him. She gave him life she dint drink jik, she dint drop him after birth, she let him live and so should he. *drags some grass* puff puff pass anyone no? #okbye

    Posted by OYE | June 21, 2011, 10:24 am
  40. Betty Betty Betty *pause* deep indeed 🙂

    Posted by Sandie Pandie | June 21, 2011, 10:38 am
  41. Oops! Re-read. The ‘rents DID NOT want her to kill him. x_x *kill me now* …but still if she reeeally wantd to kill him she wudda. And her folks wud shout n all when they found out but that’ll be water under the bridge wudnt it. So… Baba should STILL pipe down n quit the jamb questions!

    Posted by *insertPseudonym* | June 21, 2011, 10:41 am
  42. How could the church have snitched on the poor woman…..abi the boy use jazz track in mama ni?

    Posted by skilobo | June 21, 2011, 10:58 am
  43. Dat is how u will be sharing my Zobo to ppl anyhow…anyway sha…Zobo Endorphins will change their modd just right…hehehehe

    Posted by GidiMallam | June 21, 2011, 11:13 am
  44. Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful Pemi….loved it 🙂

    Posted by freshprinz | June 21, 2011, 11:20 am
  45. Hahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!

    Posted by Kolawole Bastien Shawana | June 21, 2011, 11:34 am
  46. Wow….betty’s story tellin is off the fucking chain.

    D woman deserves death bt d guy should b d bigger person and give her a second chance.besides,he now has a rich stepfather 😀

    Posted by Immortal TeddyBear | June 21, 2011, 11:52 am
  47. I’m sorry, what exactly does she deserve to die for? For being raped? For being forced to keep a child she didnt want? for making the only decision a misguided teenager could come up with at the time? For being haunted by her past through her numerous failed relationships and marriages? abeeeggiii. too many judgemental people on the comments section today yo.

    Society is always too harsh on the woman. All I see are 3 victims of a harsh circumstance, one of whom has a gun. Why didnt the angry bastard-fool hunt down his robber-killer-animal-scum-of-the-earth father and kill him instead? abeg, he should go and sit down or get laid.

    Betty, well done. I love your stories. Marry me? 🙂

    Errr….okbye!

    Posted by ThinkTank! | June 21, 2011, 12:08 pm
  48. Your children will be what you tell them they will be. Her own Karma just returned to her.

    Posted by papyrusczar | June 21, 2011, 12:08 pm
  49. Someone should sha die. I suggest Musa, for allowing the son use voice recognition to gain access to the bullet proof room. Nonsense!

    Posted by terdoh | June 21, 2011, 12:59 pm
  50. hahahahaha… oh my days!

    Posted by Simmylala | June 21, 2011, 1:32 pm
  51. oh o.. what is this.. you want to beat Dania to it.. ok o.. Betty.. what say you?

    Posted by thetoolsman | June 21, 2011, 1:40 pm
  52. hahahaha…

    Posted by thetoolsman | June 21, 2011, 1:41 pm
  53. Just goes to show the power of the tongue, especially the words of a parent spoken to their child. It’s usually only by the more powerful positive confession, especially that of the child in question that such a hold can be broken. Other than that, the child’s path has been laid before them and they have no choice but to walk in it.

    @Think_tank That would be her crime, if any and I believe that was exactly his grouse with her ie the words she spoke to him- in reminder, in unlawful accusation and in declaration.

    Posted by 0latoxic | June 21, 2011, 1:41 pm
  54. TheToolsman almosts always replies/responds to kechilauren’s comments. There seems to be a pattern here. Hmmmm,meanwhile back to the post,if some nollywood director picks this up,Jim iyke would def be playing the intruder.

    Posted by lance | June 21, 2011, 2:02 pm
  55. The question should be why should he kill her? So what if she abandoned him as a child, she definately didnt plan on having a baby in that early stage of her life and she well had the chance to kill him but she didnt. She left him in a church because she knew she couldnt handle being a mother. Is her action justifiabe?… hell yes. Is his question justifiable?… hell no. Reason?…..he turned out to be just what she predicted.

    Posted by trust me i know | June 21, 2011, 2:10 pm
  56. lol. sicko

    Posted by mzs_pam | June 21, 2011, 2:15 pm
  57. After someone goes..its a lose/lose situation still..honestly..he gains nothing..he’ll continue being depressed

    Posted by @TheJadeM | June 21, 2011, 2:29 pm
  58. Back off darling, she’s taken.

    Posted by 'Dania | June 21, 2011, 2:31 pm
  59. Oh WoW, nice read, like most comments i have read he shouldn’t kill her of course, the whole story is painful but killing her is definitely not going to make it any better. And as for the tycoon, when he said “Victoriaaaaaa”, Lol I read that in heavy igbo accent! lol i wonder why! heheheheh–Nice story!
    xx

    Posted by Gee | June 21, 2011, 2:35 pm
  60. I don’t even kno wot to say….wait…
    *scrolls up*…ohh betty tuesdays…

    Not surprising…always delivering …I want ur dark side…

    Posted by ibetapassmynebo | June 21, 2011, 2:36 pm
  61. Thank you, @thinktank, #ThatIsAll

    Posted by @deevagal | June 21, 2011, 2:57 pm
  62. Hank Anuku?

    Posted by kblewin | June 21, 2011, 3:13 pm
  63. Funny, the oly thing I took frm here was the superb use of your full stop. Something i’m trying to learn. I’m too taken by the comma…
    As for whether he should kill her or not, I agree with Thinktank. She commited no crime really, but to be a victim of circumstance. The son should take a chill pill juh, and, like somone said, move in with them. Or take some money monthly on a blackmail basis.

    Posted by slimsiren | June 21, 2011, 3:21 pm
  64. Yeah its easy for most of you to judge now, but dudes remember she was raped!
    She wasn’t an irresponsible teenager blaming a kid for her own mistakes. I agree the robber didn’t deserve the treatment, but he is the unfortunate outcome of a very tragic experience!
    I’m sure she resents herself for abandoning him, for making his life hell the 7 years she was with him. She carried him for 9 months, she had a connection with that child!
    He shouldn’t blame her for what he has become. I won’t accept that as an excuse!!

    Posted by mizzkenzo | June 21, 2011, 3:28 pm
  65. She was young. Hurt. and most likely, confused. he represented the product of the darkest part of her life. Some women will somehow find joy in a child who was the result of rape. Most wont. She didnt. Right or wrong, She did what she thought best at that time. So he definitely shudnt kill her. She’s been living with the consequences or her actions and her assailant’s. That’s enough….
    IF he really wants to exact some kinda retribution, he shud hunt down the sorry piece of shit that is his father and put at least a dozen bullets in his body…

    Posted by kblewin | June 21, 2011, 3:36 pm
  66. She can never love him. There is nothing for him there.
    He was an idiot to go after all.

    He kills her then what? His hurt won’t heal.
    He doesn’t kill her then what? Worst case, she loses that present marriage and gets in another. He still won’t gain the mother he seeks for.

    He’s too old to be craving for motherly love, especially where it is non-existent.
    Either way, he shouldn’t have gone.
    He shoulda found a dark woman and fallen in love.

    Posted by afrosays | June 21, 2011, 4:27 pm
  67. I love the way you use ‘juh’ instead of ‘jor’. Seems so… tush…

    Posted by 0latoxic | June 21, 2011, 5:06 pm
  68. There’s nothing sexy about the story. It’s sad, and it’s very real too. It’s really unfortunate that it happened…*sigh*..such misfortune!

    Dude shouldn’t kill her…My God, how difficult this is…it’s so hard but he should move on. I think the experience will haunt her as long as she lives..but I agree with All Heart..she did what was right, at least she didn’t abort him. In such a traumatising situation she could’ve aborted him, but she didn’t..so that’s commendable. On the other hand, she should still have raised him, regardless…easier said than done though..such a shame but this is real life.

    Everybody makes mistakes..we all deserve a second chance…Killing her will only hurt more..

    Ay! Dios mio…..

    Posted by awizii | June 21, 2011, 5:30 pm
  69. ahem.. cough..cough…

    Posted by thetoolsman | June 21, 2011, 5:41 pm
  70. By whom? You? O_o?
    Anyway I already have a mistress to love and adore. Enjoy ur Lesbian-Writers-Love.

    Posted by ThinkTank! | June 21, 2011, 7:00 pm
  71. ..And the poor 44 year old lady was jejely asleep oh before all this drama started.

    Great story Pemi. I love the way you write.

    Posted by missfadesomi | June 21, 2011, 8:17 pm
  72. I dey tell you….niggas! stop snitching! cc @RILEYBOONDOCKS…lol

    Posted by awizii | June 21, 2011, 8:24 pm
  73. ooh karma is a biatch!

    Posted by kitkat | June 21, 2011, 11:21 pm
  74. Tension!!! *grabbing asun-flavored popcorn*

    Posted by turrbomaximusIII | June 23, 2011, 9:35 am

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